Thursday, 14 October 2010

final draft "pollution"

        Although we suffer from many problems , pollution is the most dangerous one we face today .
It has too types as : water pollution , air pollution , noise pollution and so on . But the one which is more common in our society as an industrial country is air pollution . 

1 comment:

  1. Hi ASMAA ;
    ur essay is simple &has aclear introduction ,body& definite conclusion
    BUT u have some mistakes:
    1-ur intoduction is very short.
    2-u need to write more information.
    3-u have problems in verb agreement(it has too types as.......)(it have many types)
    (has a terrible effects)(have terrible effects)
    4-(so on)should be(etc,)
    5-(which causes lack of the amount of oxygen)u should write more details)
    6-(smoke...cars,killer poisons)wrong word choice
    7-(demolishing...)(deforestration)
    8-(but the one which is more common)literal meaning
    9- (first,)wrong puncituation
    10-u should write more to improve ur style
    good luck

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