Youth immigration is one of the important cases that needs to be discussed as it is an argumentative matter . As one of the Egyptian youth i am against our youth aimless immigration as it destroys our future .
If we talk about the causes that push youth to migrate , we must notice that poverty , unemployment and lack of employment opportunities are the main causes of youth immigration . In fact most university graduates find it is very difficult to find a job nowadays .They complete their long studies in order to start a long journey in searching for a job and for a better life . They only find despair which leads them to think of immigration .
But not all our youth immigrants put these causes in consideration while thinking of immigration . As they only think of the benefits of immigration . They may go abroad for the purpose of education . Also they can do post graduate studies there . By traveling one can know a lot about customs, traditions of other countries . One can get in touch with people of other cultures , see different systems of life . Many of youth turns to traveling abroad to achieve themselves either by work or by study .
Although traveling abroad and immigration has many merits ,it has also some demerits . A large number of youth who migrate to a foreign countries face a great failure as those travel without planning or thinking of What will they do there ?,Where will they stay ? and Which job will they have? They think that when they reach this country they will find everything they wants is possible and easy to catch . They think that they will achieve their dream of wealth and high estate , but the fact that they face hard troubles because they rarely find a job and even if they find a job , it is always humiliated one which they can stand it as no one knows them there .
Immigration also has two types , first there is a legal immigration and second there is an illegal immigration .We all know the legal immigration , but the illegal immigration is difficult to be determined according to its nature . The illegal migrants have a different kinds as follows :
- Individuals who step in illegally without setting right their legal situation .
- Individuals who step in legally but they extend after the end of the allowed period .
- Individuals who work illegally during allowed accommodation.
For example , the view of invalid boats which are accumulated for migrants became a repeated scene as youth take some of these boats to Libya and then to Europe . So the numbers of drowned Egyptians in the Mediterranean Sea increasing , during sneaking into Europe union countries . According to that the migrants youth are the victims in any case.
There is an opinion which sees that immigration provide youth with the opportunity to success as whatever they want is possible . The immigrant youth gain more from the cultures, thoughts and technology of the society they migrate to. They see the bright side of immigration .
There is another opinion which is against immigration at all , they ask youth to wait for government posts or to find any job but in the homeland.
To sum up , in my opinion immigration is not bad itself, but we must know what we will do abroad and be sure of our future there . If they will not be sure of that , they should stay in their homeland . They should not wait for the government posts ,but they should learn different professions to help them earn their living .To have your own business that has become a must that can not be ignored. these businesses may be a small factory , a small plot of cultivable land ,or a shop ....
But it is not a laughing matter as it needs patience , sleepless nights , perseverance and hard work.
A good draft.
ReplyDeleteYou have a rich ideas and a full content but you need to organize you ideas better.
There are some detailed corrections asuch as:
1. As one of the Egyptian youth(put a comma) i (capitalize).
2. In fact most university graduates find(face) (it is very) difficult(difficulty) to (in) find(ing) a job nowadays .
3. But not all (our) youth immigrants put these causes in consideration while
4. A large number of youth who migrate to (a) foreign countries face a great failure as those travel without planning or thinking of What(don’t capitalize) will they do there ?,Where(don’t capitalize) will they stay ? and Which(don’t capitalize) job will they have? They (don’t capitalize) think that when they reach this country they will find everything they want(s is) possible and easy to catch .
5. They think that they will achieve their dream of wealth and high estate(wrong choice of word) , but the fact that they face hard troubles because they rarely find a job and even if they find a job , it is always (a)humiliated one which they can stand (it) as no one knows them there .
5. (I think you have to start your essay with this paragraph, then organize your essay accordingly)Immigration also has two types , first there is a legal immigration and second there is an illegal immigration .
6. The illegal migrants have ( a) different kinds as follows :
7. So the numbers of drowned Egyptians in the Mediterranean Sea(are) increasing , during sneaking into Europe union countries .
8. There is an opinion which sees that immigration provide(s) youth with the opportunity to success (succeed) as whatever they want is possible .
9. There is another opinion which is against immigration at all (who) ask(s) youth to wait for government posts or to find any job but in the homeland.
10.To sum up , in my opinion immigration is not bad (migration itself) is not bad (itself),
11. To have your own business that has become a must that can not be ignored(incomplete sentence).
very good draft .it contains an interesting introduction and an organised conclusion ,also clear conter opinion,but take care of grammatical mistake.welldone smsm.
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